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Post by ClymAngus » Fri Feb 19, 2010 9:55 pm

El Viejo wrote: I had thought that the descriptions of space combat would be the easiest bits to write, but it was the other way around. I think that you have to be either really brief, or really detailed… there is no middle ground.


Well yeah, I tend to find it all depends on focus. You can enthral the audience for a paragraph with the finest detail. Maybe even an insignificant detail, if your hitting a cliff hanger then you can get away with staring at the cliff edge for a moment or two. Or turn it into a new dramatic peak of the ongoing dramatic crescendo.

Consider; Two paragraphes describe the same action. (this is a way of doing it, I'm sure you have 101 better solutions, sorry I find humility important around my elders and betters, I show view points and nothing more. )

"The ship evaporated the shrapnel pinging off the hull"

"the ship evaporated, so close that the captain could almost feel the heat of it's destruction. He twisted the yoke violently, desparate to avoid the deadly shrapnel surging from the detonating hulk. The lights flickered as the engines chewed up the space borne remains of the ruined krait. They spluttered back into life. The ship was safe, they were safe."

yeah, it's a bit wordy but you get the angle I'm coming from yeah? Still doesn't detract from the fact in pretty much every other way your about three times better than me. :D

Anything or everything other than repetition, repetition says "I can't do" or even worse "I can't be assed to do".

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Post by Cody » Fri Feb 19, 2010 10:10 pm

That is what I meant by ‘nearly caused a rewrite’… if I had spent another week on it, I might have come up with something like that. It’s a very good example that you offer and it may well appear in another piece.

I cannot write lyrics like you though… the ‘Windmills of your Mind’ rehash is glorious.


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Post by pagroove » Thu Mar 25, 2010 11:39 pm

Just finished Coyote. Excellent work Amigo!
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Post by Killer Wolf » Sun Mar 28, 2010 11:28 am

i'm getting an error, says the file can't be repaired when Acro tried to open it? :-/

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Post by Cody » Sun Mar 28, 2010 12:33 pm

I can't explain that, KW... just checked and it opens fine (in Adobe Reader 9.3).
Anybody else had a problem?

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Post by Diziet Sma » Sun Mar 28, 2010 12:43 pm

Works fine with Foxit Reader.
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Post by JazHaz » Mon Apr 05, 2010 1:46 am

Have added Coyote to the new Fan Fiction page on the Elite Wiki, which is linked to from the Oolite main website. :)

http://wiki.alioth.net/index.php/Catego ... te_stories
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drew wrote:£4,500 though! :shock: <Faints>
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Maybe you could start a Kickstarter Campaign to found your £4500 pledge. 8)
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Post by Cody » Mon Apr 05, 2010 1:14 pm

Thanks, JazHaz.

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Post by Cody » Mon Jun 07, 2010 10:07 am

JazHaz… did ‘Coyote’ get lost when the Wiki went down?

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Post by JazHaz » Mon Jun 07, 2010 10:16 am

El Viejo wrote:JazHaz… did ‘Coyote’ get lost when the Wiki went down?
Must've done! :o Have put it back.
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Post by Cody » Mon Jun 07, 2010 10:18 am

Thank you sir.

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Post by Ganelon » Thu Jul 08, 2010 1:04 am

Excellent story, El Viejo. And it was the first time in many years that I listened to that Quicksilver Messenger Service album.

Brilliant story, and it sets such a mood!

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Post by Dave McRoss » Thu Jul 08, 2010 9:04 am

Nice story, congrats :)
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Post by CaptSolo » Fri Mar 18, 2011 10:19 pm

A truly wonderful story and a great read. Well Done El Viego.

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Post by ClymAngus » Mon Mar 21, 2011 4:59 pm

El Viejo wrote:That is what I meant by ‘nearly caused a rewrite’… if I had spent another week on it, I might have come up with something like that. It’s a very good example that you offer and it may well appear in another piece.

I cannot write lyrics like you though… the ‘Windmills of your Mind’ rehash is glorious.


Regards
Why thank you, but please don't misunderstand me. I fully acknowledge that writing is kind of like sledging; We have to trudge back up hill to get to the fun parts! :)

You are right, it is an all or nothing kind of thing and if there is no passion for it then that becomes quite difficult to disguise in the writing. If you do have a span that your having difficulty with then I would be honoured if you would run it past me. I have found bouncing ideas of another interested party (but with you having ultimate editorial control) can be a fairly beneficial experience.

By the way I do have to say, from the small parts I have seen of it, it is a pleasure seeing Coyote, Udian and all the others interacting. Drew is writing all our collective character fetishes, masterfully.

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